Third Draft of Synopsis-Notes

Spelling and Grammar errors

• ‘The Hoodie, begins to spark up a conversation about Chelsea…’ à Remove comma: ‘The Hoodie begins to spark up a conversation about Chelsea.’

Mis En Scene Changes

• ‘Down the road, a boy about the age of 15, wearing a ripped pair of shorts…’ à Make the Mis En Scene more suitable to the season (winter): ‘Down the road, a boy about the age of 15, wearing a pair of ripped jeans…’
• Change whole setting of the film from a bus-stop to a train station. This is because it will be much more practical.
• E.g. ‘A young man, 18, is standing at a bus stop…’ à ‘A young man, 18, is standing at an empty platform of a train station…’
• Notes are following an interview had with a tutor who has experience filming on buses. The problems with filming on a bus: It’s hard to get a smooth and steady shot, there will be a lot of sound issues due to buses being very noisy, there maybe be opposition from the bus driver.
• Alternative à Filming in a train station/on a train.
• Advantages of this: Smoothness of the shot will improve, more probability of space on the carriage and sound improves greatly.
• Queue research on quiet train stations.
• This means that I will have to ‘Guerrilla film’ my footage.
• Queue research on this style of filming.

General changes

·        Change the title to tie in more with the film and it’s meaning.

·        ‘Decisions’à ‘Blues for Life’.

·        This reflects how even though the two older boys at the bus stop, (and in the bigger picture) are different and individual people, they are identified with this certain group and can’t break out of it.